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Study Plan
Dear Visa Officer, how do you do?
I am **, born on **, graduated from **in 2001.Beginning from primary school, under diligent education of teachers, I have not only learned necessary scientific and cultural knowledge, but also developed good morality and quite strong studying and independent living ability.
I like the specialty of financial accounting and market management knowledge very much, which have made me realize the value of commercial operation more profoundly. I have practiced at ** and engaged in financial management. Replying on the knowledge which I learned at school, I fulfilled my work quite well and was praised by my chief. Of course, I also realized my shortage in practice, for example, I have insufficient knowledge of market operation and management. Therefore I have been longing to receive high quality education. Canada has world-known higher education, developed economy, deep campus study atmosphere and friendly people, therefore, I have been longing to study market operation and management in Canada. Therefore I studied English at Beijing Foreign Studies University from March to July 2002 to get prepared for going to Canada for further studies.
I submitted my application for studying in your country to your embassy in December 2002. Probably due to that fact that I failed to explain my family’s income and deposit clearly, my application was rejected in February 2003. I have been terribly grieved since I received the rejection letter. My parents saw my worry and talked with me and gave me great encouragement. We think we could be understood by the visa officer if we further explain our real economic situation. Therefore, through careful consideration, I have decided to submit my application to your embassy once again.
If my application for studying in Canada can be approved, I will firstly study courses of ESL at ** College of your country and try to improve my English and make it meet the requirement of your country the sooner the better. Then I will enter ** University to study the course of degree of bachelor of commerce. During the period of study, I will carefully study theoretical knowledge on the one hand, and positively take part in various practical activities on the other, try to improve y practical work ability. At the same time, I will positively take part in various public beneficial activities to deeply understand the Western culture and improve my comprehensive quality.
Before I graduate from university, my parents will provide all the expenses for my studies in your country. They have stable jobs and quite high income and are fully capable to support me.
I will come back home upon graduation from university. I love my motherland and my motherland needs young people like me to carry pit construction. I will realize my own value in serving my motherland. The specialty which I will learn in Canada is very helpful and useful in China. China is full of market and opportunities. I will not give up any opportunities. Therefore, I will come back home to get employed upon completion of my studies in your country.
Sincerely hope I can realize my dream of studying in your country soon. Thanks.更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net
Study Plan
Dear Visa Officer, how do you do?
I am **, born on **, graduated from **in 2001.Beginning from primary school, under diligent education of teachers, I have not only learned necessary scientific and cultural knowledge, but also developed good morality and quite strong studying and independent living ability.
I like the specialty of financial accounting and market management knowledge very much, which have made me realize the value of commercial operation more profoundly. I have practiced at ** and engaged in financial management. Replying on the knowledge which I learned at school, I fulfilled my work quite well and was praised by my chief. Of course, I also realized my shortage in practice, for example, I have insufficient knowledge of market operation and management. Therefore I have been longing to receive high quality education. Canada has world-known higher education, developed economy, deep campus study atmosphere and friendly people, therefore, I have been longing to study market operation and management in Canada. Therefore I studied English at Beijing Foreign Studies University from March to July 2002 to get prepared for going to Canada for further studies.
I submitted my application for studying in your country to your embassy in December 2002. Probably due to that fact that I failed to explain my family’s income and deposit clearly, my application was rejected in February 2003. I have been terribly grieved since I received the rejection letter. My parents saw my worry and talked with me and gave me great encouragement. We think we could be understood by the visa officer if we further explain our real economic situation. Therefore, through careful consideration, I have decided to submit my application to your embassy once again.
If my application for studying in Canada can be approved, I will firstly study courses of ESL at ** College of your country and try to improve my English and make it meet the requirement of your country the sooner the better. Then I will enter ** University to study the course of degree of bachelor of commerce. During the period of study, I will carefully study theoretical knowledge on the one hand, and positively take part in various practical activities on the other, try to improve y practical work ability. At the same time, I will positively take part in various public beneficial activities to deeply understand the Western culture and improve my comprehensive quality.
Before I graduate from university, my parents will provide all the expenses for my studies in your country. They have stable jobs and quite high income and are fully capable to support me.
I will come back home upon graduation from university. I love my motherland and my motherland needs young people like me to carry pit construction. I will realize my own value in serving my motherland. The specialty which I will learn in Canada is very helpful and useful in China. China is full of market and opportunities. I will not give up any opportunities. Therefore, I will come back home to get employed upon completion of my studies in your country.
Sincerely hope I can realize my dream of studying in your country soon. Thanks.更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net